The Dangers of Reality TV
I agree with the points made by the author in this article, especially the education The education is the most important thing that a person can achieve for their personal development in the future; fame and fortune that participants gain in these programs are not permanent and can be vanished, education instead stays with the person for the rest of his life.
Unfortunately, these TV shows do not require a level of education for participants and send the wrong message to the audience into thinking that on these programs is much easier to make a lot more money than a person who sacrificed studying to get a college degree.'
As an example of the value and importance of education. My friend brothers who finish only school I think 8 grades won the lottery. When the news came out in newspapers, appeared many friends who did not see in years start to visit him asking for money, also he get started to spend money on many things that were not necessary, and lead a life as a millionaire in many parties and fun, plus a lot of people asking them to invest money with them, in the end it happened that the money is finished, also he take a lot of credits and the worst part that my friend discovered was the administrator stolen money. This experience was a warning for him and many people that think the study is not important to succeed, of course the education is necessary so that other people do not take advantage of us.
In conclusion, we should become aware as an audience and especially as parents to explain to our young children that these programs are part of the fantasies created by the producers of the Programs to earn more money by sending erroneous and negative messages like thinking that life which can be as easy without education.
In conclusion, we should become aware as an audience and especially as parents to explain to our young children that these programs are part of the fantasies created by the producers of the Programs to earn more money by sending erroneous and negative messages like thinking that life which can be as easy without education.
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ReplyDeleteHello Sophia. I am a student in Dr. X’s class and I was asked to give you feedback on your revision of CAT 1.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all,
I think your claim/thesis is very clear because it had strong example.
Next,
your reasons connect to the topic well and are easy to understand. One reason I liked was about education.
Also,
your evidence was solid but general, as for example when you write about education but you needed to give more juicy examples.
Lastly, I would like you to know that
the whole was easy to read. Good job!
CAT 1.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I LOVE your summery it was perfect to me I will copy from you
I think your claim/thesis is very clear because education is key and the fact that you can always have that degree in school not the one hit wonder shows
your reasons connect to the topic well and are easy to understand. One reason I liked
was when I came to this country, when I was asking for job, most of the people talked me that I never will get a job in the same major, but I think you should have some more examples ,try to go deeper inn depth
your evidence was very nice but brief
I could not understand your evidence.
Lastly, I would like you to know that
the whole was easy to read. Good job!
Anyone with the link
You are right flowerross, that the evidence does not connect super well with the theme of reality TV, so you should add a sentence or two that does precisely that.
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