"The Allegory of the Cave"
"The Allegory on the Cave" from the book VII of The Republic by Plato, the author describe that Socrates explain to Glaucon how the humans act when they are living underground in the caves as a prisoner of they on believes only with the shadows of the images or projection's from the fire, away from the reality around their own shadows as a marionettes and illusions.
When one of the prisoner is move away from these caves and see the light of the sun, he saw that there is a different world outside of the caves, he face up the error from where they are living on the darkness of the shadows and he feel confused. But returning to the caves the rest of the people try to persuade him that what he saw is only an illusion, because from them this person lost part of the abilities to identified the images that were projected from the fire, the only world that they know.
When people from the caves accept with responsibility the reality of the life on the new world they will be wisdom of the decision, and will get better life outside of the caves with out chains and shadows of the darkness.
hi flowers ross i'm commenting in your summary as a class assigment to give you feedback on your writting . your summary is very good you identify the thesis of the passage and the ideas, you don;t have any spelling mistake just one or too grammar but it didnt made the sentence hard to understand . your very discripteve of the ideas but yoou seem to consentrate too much in them and loose focus on the theis . alhought you add it your own opiions and words it seem as you have reword some sentence from the passage. just organize your thought before writting and it would help you focus more . ps just remeber to expain who are the character your using to expalin the main ideas and the ideas from the paasage
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Hi, Michelle (flower Ross). I’m commenting on your summary as an ENG101 class assignment to give you feedback on your writing. Your summary is good, you identify the main idea, and you kind of have just a little spelling mistake and grammar. I did kind of got lost in the introduction but it was well stated. You did include your personal opinion on the body paragraph, and you also wrote it on your own words. I will suggest you go a little further with the summary, let’s say I’ve never read the Allegory of The Cave, I will totally be lost and say "wrong" what in the world this is?. But since I did read the book I know what you’re talking about and is well done.
My suggestions
Go a little further with the summary.
Give more details.
And next time proof read what you wrote out loud to check yourself if there’s some missing.
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Nice comments!
ReplyDeleteMy feedback would be that you seem to understand the main message of Socrates' fable. Perhaps just stating it without the details of the story would have been better.